You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

These days
people
start going to live in the bigger cities. So, some
people
believe that the
health
it could constitute bad than the other places.
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essay will discuss some other views with the main one and will draw my personality conclusion.
Firstly
, I agree with that opinion and
health
it is something could anybody take care of it but, in the capital cities could be harder
specially
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if
you
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parents
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of children
thatis
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that is
that's
a huge responsibility.
On the other hand
, the life value is high in the large cities but
people
in there have bad
health
. To illustrate, fast
food
in every way is
also
healthy
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a healthy
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one, humans work in there takes from them a lot of time.
Moreover
, they
forgete
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forget
to mad healthy
food
besides
they eat
food
might
no
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not
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know how much it is unclean and bad for the body
health
and
mintel
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mental
health
too.
On the other hand
, rural areas have
many
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opportunities for
health
than the other place with
large
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number of humans.
For example
,
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clean air to breathe in and clear water and organic
food
also
the sleep value would be deeper because of no noise outside.
However
,
that is
why some
people
think that all of these simple things make
health
better.
In addition
, they have to do more work by themselves.
For instance
, huge spaces need to take from them that plant they would cook it and repeat the mission every day.
Moreover
, shout plating the garden
first
and have to carry of them.
Hence
the belief that eats more taster ingredients from the nature than
that
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we take them from the supermarkets. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both views, I believe that
people
should balance
of
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what they eat if they have to go to a big city.
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