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Many people feel that media coverage has becoming increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?

#people #media #coverage
Media
 is one of the most popular television channels
that is
 used around the
world
 to seek,
understanad
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understand
 and
gaining
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 knowledge about the
world
. Most feel
media
coverage
 is
increasigly
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increasingly
 being
prejudice
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 today and I will give my reasoning and solution to fix
this
 problem
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 essay.
Media
 is
most
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 convenient way to access
on
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what is happening in the nation and around the
world
. In recent times, due to
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the increasingly
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increasingly
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 use of
internet
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the internet
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 social
media
such
 as Facebook, Instagram and Twitter are where we find the news instantly. These
platforms
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platform's
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media
coverage
 is mostly biased without relevant
information
this
 can be due to
lack
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 of
information
 on
going
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 situation or just to increase the volume of viewers onto their
platform
 by only seeking in a direction or it can
also
 be due to one’s personal interest.
For instance
, during the local elections in any part of the
world
media
platform
 is been given
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 sum amount by one of the local parties to give or provide biased
information
 about their ethics or work to
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this
 form has been seen quite seen on a very often basis due to corruption.
Nevertheless
,
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information
 can be subsidised by
media
 on any
platform
 by
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 out or discussing the content with
open minded
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 people or can
also
 have an argument
by
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between
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 two groups on the given
platform
. Another way to solve
this
 issue
it
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is
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 by researching the
coverage
in depth
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 way so only relevant facts can
be
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off
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. Government can
also
 impose laws in terms of
coverage
 on
media
, so they think twice before speaking and spreading
of
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information
. Whereas, it is us the viewers who
needs
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 to be smart and educate ourselves not being deceived by them and always finding and researching the actual content
to
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 the topic. To sum
this
 up, biased
information
 on
media
cover
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 will continue to exist. It can be
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a few
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 things where any channels do not have enough access to all the
information
in
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an
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around the
world
 and
also
 it is the listeners or
viewers
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viewers'
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 duty to gain knowledge in
a
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open minded
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 so there
are
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 less confusion among us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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