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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, some
cities
 are applying
vehicles-free
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vehicle-free
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 campaigns to make private
transport
 users
as
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such as
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 automobiles, lorries and motorbikes drivers
to
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apply
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use their public
transport
 systems. With them, it is
intented
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intended
 to reduce
pollutin
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pollution
 produced from these
cities
.
By contrast
, these schemes
generates
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 dependence
of
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on
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 these public
transport
 systems. In my
opinion
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 the developed dependence is overwhelmed by the current
pollutinal
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political
pollution
 problem. On the one hand, during the
first
 year of
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic, there were a series of restrictions that reduced the usage of personal vehicles worldwide, resulting in a significative pollution
reduciton
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reduction
, being
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 concretely
for
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in
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 larger
cities
. Ignoring the
pademic
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pandemic
academic
circustances
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circumstances
, these restrictions showed the possibility of
usage
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using
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 alternative mobility options, encouraging new
restritions
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restrictions
 in Madrid and Barcelona, that hardened their mobility
restricions
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restrictions
.
Consequently
, 2021 was the less
contaminatig
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contaminating
contaminated
contamination
 year in the
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last
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lat
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last
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 decade for the
mented
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mentioned
cities
.
on the other hand
, restricting mobility towards a public
transport
 scheme could not work for smaller
cities
 with
less
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fewer
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 public
transport
 options.
For example
, in Murcia, public
transport
 is less
accurated
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accurate
 and
have
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has
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limitated
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limited
 disponibility, increasing
trafic
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traffic
 congestion over peak hours, reducing its functionality.
Additionally
, the mented
campaings
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campaigns
campaign
 are only
comtemplated
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contemplated
contemplate
 on
desely
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densely
 populated urban cores,
ingoring
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ignoring
 towns and
contriesides's
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 necessities. In conclusion, these
campaings
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campaigns
 are useful to reduce harming
hambiental
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Ambiental
factores
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factors
factories
 as
pollutinal
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political
 ones. Alternatively, it is not possible to apply them in every populated
cores
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core
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, discriminating
them
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against them
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 and forcing people to use public
transport
 in an unproductive position. I think that even whit these problems, reducing pollution overweight their disadvantages, minding the
necessary
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necessity
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 of being as ecological as possible.
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