“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above?

disagree that success is
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solely
based on hard
work
. Even though hard
work
may have taken more than 50% of the success,
luck
definitely has its own place in it. We live in a society. The surroundings always have
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on our decisions. As
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very well-known debate, "should students attend college or
work
directly after graduating from high school",
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stated, a
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wasn't a necessity but it has slowly become a must. One side of the debate stated
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people can still be successful even
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haven't
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to college. The other side said that it might just have been '
luck
' and a
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degree is a must in today's society. The
luck
stated here can be anything. Maybe someone just did
somthing
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something
at the right time,
then
he or she can be
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. Perhaps, you interviewed for a job, even though you didn't have the corresponding degree, but there was a good recruiter who was willing to give you a chance to prove yourself. Hard
work
is just the force for one to grab the
luck
. It may have taken a big portion of your effort but it is not the crucial part.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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