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Now your teacher has asked you to write an essay. Write your essay using all the notes and giving reasons for your point of view. More and more people prefer online shopping these days. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping?

#teacher #notes #point #people
Online shopping in our world now is very popular prefered by the youngsters and the old ones. Online shopping
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 a lot
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variety of products and
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 necessary to travel for the wanted product. More and more people prefer online shopping these days. There are advantages and disadvantages. The advantages are many. One of them you can have a look
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 you want and don't need to travel.
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 you don't need to travel to get the item you want because you have delivery which can be free
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 on the side you are looking
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price
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 very easy you can open many sites and have a look
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 the prices
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 you will have the cheapest of the most expensive.
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 the other hand, you can become very
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spend your all money
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 online shopping, Most
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the
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teens are
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for
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 online shopping. The parents of the teens need to have control of the
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 and their payment methods. The
disadvantages
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 for me is you
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 be sure what will come and for the clothes and shoes if they fit you. To summit all,
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online shopping is very effective and easy for the people who
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 spend time
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 to many malls and they
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don't
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 need to pay for delivery because almost the delivery is free.
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