Whether or not someone achieves their aims in life is mostly a question of luck? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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luck

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in our life is widely discussed among

people

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over

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all over

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the world,a lot of

people

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believe that

luck

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plays an important part in reaching their goals.

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While others

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argue that

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, talent,

hard-working

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hard work

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, and motivation are

also

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nessarary

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necessary

for achieving their aim. I strongly hold

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that achieving their aim

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does

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not rely on only

luck

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with,

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is always the most obvious way to

get

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achieve

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success.

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, Babar Azam is a famous cricket captain player in Pakistan who is very hard working.Joining the national cricket team

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not easy for him. he was a ball boy in childhood in the stadium,

when

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and when

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he was a teen he joined the cricket academy and started working on his skills.,

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he did a part-time job

for paying

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to pay

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the institute fee.

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, His

diligence

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make a way for him what he dreamed for his life.

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, Talent

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plays a vital role in achieving our aims.For ,example If someone

will

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does

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not have the confidence to act

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with

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a bunch of

people

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, how would he

get

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achieve

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success in his life

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In addition

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, Talent is

also

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working to reach the goal is

such

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diligence

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. On

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the other

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hand,some

people

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believe that

luck

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is more important than any other factor.

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, the child is born into a rich family so it means that he will have the opportunity to get a

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higher

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standard of education than other

people

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.and it will help him to achieve his aim.like if he wanted to be a doctor, and his family is so supportive and helped him to achieve the goal that he set.so it means that he is lucky that he got

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a good supportive family because not everyone is lucky like him. In Conclusion.

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our aims is not only dependent on

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there are

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other ways to get the success that we want.

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task response

Ensure a clear position on the issue of luck in achieving aims is stated and maintained throughout the essay. Develop arguments more consistently and provide a balanced evaluation of both sides of the argument.

coherence and cohesion

Improve the logical flow of ideas by using transitions to connect sentences and paragraphs more effectively. Ensure there is a clear introduction, body, and conclusion structure in the essay.

10
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

313 words

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