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in the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, in the digital age, online media play an important role in all industries over the world. Everyone easily reaches information through electronic devices
such
 as mobile phones or tablets.
However
, I firmly disagree that no usage of physical newspapers or books in the future.
This
 essay will outline the reasons that
people
 still prefer reading
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real books rather than modern gadgets.
First
 of all, reading a printed book is more comfortable for eyesight than reading from a computer screen. The blue light from screens can cause eye itching and eyes muscle pain which roots some diseases in the long term result. Reading from a real book is not only beneficial for the reader's eyesight but
also
 gives relaxation. Some
people
 are fascinated by ink and paper smell and love to flip paper by themself.
Secondly
, physical books are more reliable than the contents which are available on
internet
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. Most of them have
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 and checked references in the book. Readers can ensure the correctness of data.
This
 is different from the data from social media which cannot
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 the source of
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. At
last
,
although
people
 can access enormous data over
internet
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, I strongly believe that there's some
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 information that can be found only in
physical
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 textbooks. It is obvious that many students still use libraries to be a knowledge resource. In conclusion, I believe that reading from real materials has many advantages more than disadvantages.
Although
 it is decreasing in popularity in the present day
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there are some
people
 who are fond of reading through printed materials.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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