The key to solving environmental problems is for the present generation to sacrifice their convenient way of life for sake of future generations. Do you agree or this disagree with this statement?

These days, confronting
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issues
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moral
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in
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world. There is a common belief that solving environmental problems is in charge of
current
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the current
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generation
to spend their life to save it for
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generation
. While
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many say that future
generation
is responsible to protect it.
Although
there are arguments on both sides, I strongly disagree that
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generation
sacrifice
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their convenient life for sake of
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generation
. There are convincing arguments in
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of solving environmental
issues
by
current
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generation
.
Firstly
, they can try to be more environmentally friendly. Individuals who are living in
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era can
use
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more renewable resources rather than non-renewable
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of saving
this
energy for
future
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.
In other words
,
people
could replace eco-friendly vehicles with petrol-driven cars. Take
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electric vehicles as an example, cars will reduce to
use
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fuels so that future
generation
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will apparently utilize
it
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as raw materials in
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manufacturing
other
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items like plastic.
As a result
,
present
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generation
would be effective to remedy the environmental
issues
and protect
it
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them
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with changing in their life way.
Secondly
,
present
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generation
can
use
less harmful
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to
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environment
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. If
people
use
less harmful items which are led to environmental degradation, it will solve some environmental
issues
.
For instance
, farmers in developed countries have been utilizing heavy machinery like tractors to cultivate, resulting in soil erosion and compacting.
This
method could be changed in order to solve some environmental
issues
.
However
, it is predicted that
,
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solving environmental problems by
coming
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generation
will be done.
first
and foremost, they will apparently present innovative and creative
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ways
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to confront
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environmental
issues
. Simply put, they would present innovative
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and invent cutting edge
gadget
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to solve environmental
issues
.
For example
,
next
people
would invent the innovative method which
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water into oil containing
less
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the less
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harmful chemical
substance
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.
In addition
, raising
next
generation
awareness. these
people
can
have
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effective contribute to
solve
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environmental
issues
,
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if they educate correctly.
For instance
,
an
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educationa
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educational
education
institutions in Canada, are taking
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aimed to raise young adults' awareness to prevent environmental degradation. In conclusion,
although
the current
generation
plays a crucial role to solve environmental
issues
,
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next-generation
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next
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the next
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generation
would contribute positively because of their new invention and awareness.
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