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The key to solving environmental problems is for the present generation to sacrifice their convenient way of life for sake of future generations. Do you agree or this disagree with this statement?

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These days, confronting
environment
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issues
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 is a
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individuals
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 moral
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 in
whole
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 world. There is a common belief that solving environmental problems is in charge of
current
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the current
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generation
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 to spend their life to save it for
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a new
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generation
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. While
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 many say that future
generation
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 is responsible to protect it.
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 there are arguments on both sides, I strongly disagree that
present
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generation
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sacrifice
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 their convenient life for sake of
new
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generation
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. There are convincing arguments in
favor
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 of solving environmental
issues
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 by
current
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generation
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.
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, they can try to be more environmentally friendly. Individuals who are living in
recent
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 era can
use
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the
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more renewable resources rather than non-renewable
because
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 of saving
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 energy for
future
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the future
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.
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,
people
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 could replace eco-friendly vehicles with petrol-driven cars. Take
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electric vehicles as an example, cars will reduce to
use
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fossil
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of fossil
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 fuels so that future
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generation
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generations
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 will apparently utilize
it
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them
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 as raw materials in
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manufacturing
other
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 items like plastic.
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,
present
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generation
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 would be effective to remedy the environmental
issues
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 and protect
it
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them
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 with changing in their life way.
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,
present
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the present
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generation
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 can
use
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 less harmful
gadget
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to
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for
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environment
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the environment
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. If
people
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use
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 less harmful items which are led to environmental degradation, it will solve some environmental
issues
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.
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, farmers in developed countries have been utilizing heavy machinery like tractors to cultivate, resulting in soil erosion and compacting.
This
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 method could be changed in order to solve some environmental
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.
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, it is predicted that
,
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 solving environmental problems by
coming
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the coming
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generation
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 will be done.
first
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 and foremost, they will apparently present innovative and creative
way
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ways
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 to confront
the
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environmental
issues
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. Simply put, they would present innovative
approach
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approaches
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 and invent cutting edge
gadget
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gadgets
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 to solve environmental
issues
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.
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,
next
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people
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 would invent the innovative method which
turn
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 water into oil containing
less
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the less
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 harmful chemical
substance
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.
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, raising
next
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generation
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 awareness. these
people
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 can
have
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effective contribute to
solve
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solving
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 environmental
issues
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,
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 if they educate correctly.
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,
an
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educationa
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educational
education
 institutions in Canada, are taking
course
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courses
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 aimed to raise young adults' awareness to prevent environmental degradation. In conclusion,
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 the current
generation
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 plays a crucial role to solve environmental
issues
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,
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next
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the next
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generation
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 would contribute positively because of their new invention and awareness.

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