A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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often
seen that downtown has much better
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standardised
standard
of living than villages. In
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how cities
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better facilities and with proper enlightenment in rural areas can have
improve
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their living
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standards
Towns are the most
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convenient
places to live as it has all the facilities a humane needs. One of the main reasons is
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town is well built and structured with good resources
such
as better connectivity,
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, better employment opportunity and
also
we find
people
with higher amount of
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knowledge
who can contribute to society.
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: Mumbai
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as the
fiancial
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financial
hub of India and has all
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basic
needs that
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better connectivity, great humane
resourses
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resources
and
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in technology.
On the other hand
, the countryside has hardly found
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these
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for their betterment of life.
This
can be changed if
people
living here
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a good understanding
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opportunities in developing their areas by installing better roadways and railways.
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been guided with
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understanding of
importance
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of better infrastructure in
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their
locality and the most
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important
one is
goverment
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government
taking measure and
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implementing
laws for providing better employment hope for these
people
so they can contribute to their community.
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, in recent years we have seen a rise if
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in
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part of India due to
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road
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, railway and a
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newly
built airport and on top of it a better accommodation to stay
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has provided better standarded of living to these
people
. To sum it up, better laws, education and facilities will help the communities in rural areas to grow and lead to a better
standared
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standard
of living
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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