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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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At the present, some argue that the new trend is to have multiple
jobs
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 and
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 obtain
further
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 studies, as an affiliate to one career has become obsolete. Whilst, I agree with
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 statement, it is
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 a priority to balance life between career and personal affairs. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will delve
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 into my reasons. Nowadays, it is common for people to have part-time
jobs
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 aside from their regular job for two main reasons.
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, the cost of living in today's has become expensive. The economic crisis has caused constraints for many.
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, the bills have been increasing annually,
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 as electric and water consumption. Not only the household dues but
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 the basic commodities, like personal hygienes and especially the food.
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, the modern lifestyle has
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 changed. In the age of industrialization, individuals use vehicles to go to work which mainly used fuel
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 exponentially cost higher than ever. These two changes in the life of living today are the main factors why people have to earn more money by getting sidelines, to cope with their financial concerns.
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, in order to progress and career's to flourish it is a must to invest in their profession, by either enrolling in master's or attending workshops and seminars.
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, schooling has a substantial effect to commit to more
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 and
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 a reason to have one.
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, there are people that work to survive and to finance educational enhancement. Since education is
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 the key to being accepted by some employers. In conclusion, I fully reckon with the statement that multiple
jobs
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 and enrolling to
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 their studies are really a must to combat the demands of living daily.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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