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In today's world private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do You think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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It is undeniable the fact that in the present private companies have been involved in the majority of scientific research rather than the government.
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 with, private sectors sometimes take advantage of the research they have conducted by not publishing
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 information to society.
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 can lead to misunderstandings.
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, the news has reported that the ownership of
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 well-known medical company group discovered that their products will cause cancer in the long term as the substances accumulate in
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 cells.
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, they decided to continue launching the products to consumers for greater profits.
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, most countries’ science experiments have been developed significantly
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 the private companies’ investment in equipment and specialized professors.
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, results are less likely to be inaccurate,
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 young generations could
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 on new knowledge.As the government has to spend taxes on many other
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, they are not able to afford.To give an instance, approximately 70% of zero errors in new studies which involve more than a hundred million dollars in the
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 few decades are discovered by private sectors. In conclusion, I personally agree with the statement above as the advantages outweigh the drawbacks.In my opinion, as citizens pay taxes, the government should be responsible for tax management and
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 scientific studies in the country.
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task response
Provide a clear and direct response to the essay question, address all parts of the task, and present a relevant position.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clear overall progression, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Use cohesive devices to link ideas within and between paragraphs.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • private sector
  • government funding
  • technological innovation
  • competitive nature
  • profitable outcomes
  • conflict of interest
  • corporate bias
  • economic stimulation
  • public interest
  • non-profitable
  • public welfare
  • commercial applications
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