Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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there are some debations that what is the best behaviour in school involved with admission in which they experience more achievements in their assignments. some people argue that encouragement is more applicable than punishment.

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with that statement and will illustrate that pupils will feel more confident and less psychological disorders in the future if they

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under pressure.

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with, the goal is the best future for our children and so instructions and guidance should be oriented on

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road. Without any doubt, students, especially in primary and secondary education will feel more personal fulfilment and a sense of belonging to a group when they

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rewards from teachers compared to when they are faced with strict behaviour.

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, if my son does his assignments well, will be given a card as a bonus and

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of the academic year,

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a gift based on the cards by the headteacher. So I find him mostly cheerful and he finds him so talented and creative because he receives cards as a small bonus weekly and a mind game end of the year.

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, obviously, punishment has a wide range of drawbacks and definitely, it is known as an unfavourable act. many students from all levels of studies

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experience these behaviours and as an underlying repercussion, some negative feelings like depression, anxiety and embarrassment will appear

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, these students will probably

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their studies at higher levels of education and

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overcome their lessons. In conclusion, I would say, of course, some undesirable treatments

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as punishment have to be eliminated from the educational environment and the policy of both private and public schools must encourage children and youngsters to believe in their infinite abilities.

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task response

Ensure that you address all aspects of the prompt and maintain a balanced discussion between the two views. Provide a clear and well-developed personal opinion as well.

coherence and cohesion

Work on organizing your ideas more coherently. Use proper transition words to link your ideas and ensure that your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

305 words

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Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Your opinion

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