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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you today because I have seen your announcement regarding tutoring your
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 additional linguistic skills.
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 in
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 matter.
Firstly
, let me give you an idea about my qualification and experience. Notably, I am already capable of speaking 3 languages which are Arabic, German and, undoubtedly, English.
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, despite not having any previous linguistic lecturing experience, I am familiar with giving sessions related to scientific topics.
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 reasonable background when it comes to education.
Secondly
, I believe that I can
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 present a valuable addition to your household. To explain, I am significantly an open-minded person, who has extended knowledge of History, Philosophy, Literature and Arts.
Hence
, we will have the potential to enjoy a considerable amount of discussions with each other if we are given the chance.
Lastly
, I would like to highlight the underlying factors that encouraged me to communicate with you. Actually, I am enthusiastic about visiting your country and indulging in
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 ravishing nature and surroundings of it, especially its beaches and exquisite animals.
Moreover
, I would like to find out more about the nation's indigenous people and interact with them. I am looking forward to your reply. Sincerely, Youssef Abo-Dahab
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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