Many students do not finish school. Why is this, and how can the problem be solved? School Drop-Outs: Problems and Solutions

Many
students
throughout the globe don't like
school
because they are forced to
study
hard by their teachers and parents.
This
is a problem which is being talked up by some as a very serious threat because
students
aim just to pass the exams. but according to some
people
, even if you
study
you will able to earn probably low salary in the current order.
Students
who
study
only for exams will not learn anything useful .
Firstly
, most of the
students
forget
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of education and
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is very boring for them but each individual should try to improve yourself(
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which results in under-qualified in society.
In addition
, studying is usually a boring process but each
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has to go through it(içinden geçmek)). the best way for(to olacak) improve themself as cultural(culturally
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also
(at the same time
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) if they read something, their communication skills will be better than
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of the
people
. when
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said to me(bu sonda olacak) 'you should complete the university
otherwise
,
people
look at you badly’ to me.
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understood
this
sentence after(
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yerine
when I grow up). because, I saw that the more cultured you are, the more your environment(surroundings
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accordingly
.
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) their future in our country(today’s world
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they don't usually earn enough money
although
they completed the(graduate from) university.
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will be an engineer but they will get the same money as
school
dropouts so they generally think that why
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have to go
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(
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can not see any reasons to go to
school
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).
i
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partly agree with that statement because varies from person to person. To(in
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the future by reading(studying
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not studying). maybe they start a business and they give jobs to
people
who
study
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • drop out
  • completion
  • attendance
  • disengaged
  • disinterested
  • underprivileged
  • financial constraints
  • academic achievement
  • learning difficulties
  • negative peer influences
  • intimidation
  • accessibility
  • supportive environment
  • guidance
  • adolescent pregnancy
  • psychological well-being
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