Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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Museums
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are educational places filled with a range of
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and elements from
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the ancient
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history of ancestors. People expand horizons and gain knowledge by visiting
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places.
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, these days, it is obligatory to pay an entrance fee to enter some
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. Even though compulsory payment may have some disadvantages, I believe that
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the benefits
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of that phenomenon outweigh them.
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of all, it is obvious that the cost of tickets can be a problem for low-income people. They cannot afford to pay for
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they lose the opportunity for access to useful information and knowledge.
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, as we know, most of humanity craves
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free stuff.
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why charge for
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discourages them from visiting spiritually enriching places
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museums
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,
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reduces
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desire
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to explore the history and culture of their countries.
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, it
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leads to
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museums
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' popularity
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society. Despite all the drawbacks, entrance payment has
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numerous amount of merits.
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, income will help to maintain museum items in proper condition. To be precise, all the ancient relics and valuable
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require careful handling and restoration as they deteriorate.
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, money is needed for museum business needs.
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, electricity bills, room rent, expensive equipment, employers' salaries and many others.
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, money is the main basis for good visuals and quality museum content. Even from my past experiences,
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with mandatory pay
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were much better in terms of equipment, facilities, staff, and relics.
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, they had even
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. To summarize,
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make people spiritually wealthier and more intelligent. Because of that,
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charge
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the charge
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for
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causes some disadvantages, payment is really required for
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the successful
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work of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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