Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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the present, some argue that the new trend is to have multiple
jobs
and
consequently
obtain
further
studies, as an
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to one career has become obsolete. Whilst, I agree
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this
statement, it is
also
a priority to balance life between career and personal affairs. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will delve
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reasons. Nowadays, it is common for people to have part-time
jobs
aside from their regular job for two main
reason
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.
Firstly
, the cost of living
of
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today's has become expensive. The economic crisis has caused constraints for many.
For instance
, the bills have been increasing annually,
such
as electric and water consumption. Not only the household dues but
also
the basic commodities, like personal hygienes and especially the food.
Secondly
, the modern lifestyle has
also
changed. In the age of industrialization, individuals use vehicles to go to work which mainly used fuel
that is
also
exponentially cost higher than ever. These two changes in the life of living today are the main factors
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why people have to earn more money by getting sidelines, to cope with
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financial concerns.
Moreover
, in order to progress and career's to flourish it is a must to invest
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their profession, by either enrolling in master's or attending workshops and seminars.
Thus
, schooling has a substantial effect to commit to more
jobs
and
also
a reason to have one.
Hence
, there are people that work to survive and
to
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finance educational enhancement. Since
,
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education is
also
the key to
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accepted
to
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some employers. In conclusion, I fully reckon
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the statement that multiple
jobs
and enrolling to
further
the
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studies are really a must to combat the demands of living daily.
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