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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at increasing sale. Others think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that when one
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 achieves high sales
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 is due to successful
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, as well as someone else thinks
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 are dysfunctional these days,
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 discuss both views and I present my perspective in the conclusion. On the one hand, in today's the world we need to
ads
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 for higher sales and
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 it became a competition between other
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,
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, the
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 use other ways that helped them arrived at their aim, not only recently
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 is a big challenge but
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 they should learning new way for solving
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 case, the population attracted to innovative
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,
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, the very things that lead to people pay attention to a message about products means
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 were successful,
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, there are many of information about the survival of two big
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 like Benz and BMW, their broadcast
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 frequently and they
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 very creative and one of the important reasons is competition between Benz and BMW.
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, sometimes society is exhausted by
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 for many reasons and their opinion are a good
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 does not need
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 as well as they always effort to avoid watching
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, they hate advertising in media and when they see it on tv they try to change channels so
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 can be for many arguments,
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, the community always see a magic
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 and when provide that for their life they can see that
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 is very different of somethings they buy and
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 issue lead to they don't have any trust many
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. In conclusion,
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 can be beneficial if the
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 are honest with people and I believe that when we produce a good quality
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 for a long time the public can perceive that
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 is a good
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