The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
pai
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pie
chart shows the expenditures made by houses,
food
,healthcare,education transportation and other items in a
country
in
a
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the
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year 1950 and 2010. As
it
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is shown by
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the
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chart, in 1950 almost
two-
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two-thirds
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third
expenditure
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of expenditure
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was
in
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on
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housing
whereas
this averages
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the expenses of this average
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expenses
has been increased for
food
,
transport
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and transport
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in 2010. From the given data,more than 70%
expenses
of the people in
this
country
went on
in
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to
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housing
of
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in
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1950.The
second
most expenditure in
this
country
was
for
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on
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food
.All other
expenses
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includes
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include
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education and health care and
they
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apply
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where
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were
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less than 20% in total.All other expenditure in 1950 was only 4.4% which increased to roughly 20% in the year 2010.It shows the new additional
categoury
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category
in which people made
there
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their
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expenses
more in
compare
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to 1950. It
waould
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would
seem that
,
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the
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housing drained the highest percentages of money for the people in
this
country
in 1950 and after 60 years it reduced
while
the other ratio of
expenses
on
food
increased
remarkly
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remarkably
remarkedly
.
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