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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
pai
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pie
 chart shows the expenditures made by houses,
food
,healthcare,education transportation and other items in a
country
 in
a
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the
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 year 1950 and 2010. As
it
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is shown by
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the
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chart, in 1950 almost
two-
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two-thirds
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third
expenditure
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of expenditure
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 was
in
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on
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 housing
whereas
this averages
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the expenses of this average
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expenses
 has been increased for
food
,
transport
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and transport
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 in 2010. From the given data,more than 70%
expenses
 of the people in
this
country
 went on
in
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to
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 housing
of
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in
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 1950.The
second
 most expenditure in
this
country
 was
for
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on
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food
.All other
expenses
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includes
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include
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 education and health care and
they
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apply
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where
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were
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 less than 20% in total.All other expenditure in 1950 was only 4.4% which increased to roughly 20% in the year 2010.It shows the new additional
categoury
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category
 in which people made
there
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their
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expenses
 more in
compare
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comparison
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 to 1950. It
waould
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would
 seem that
,
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the
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housing drained the highest percentages of money for the people in
this
country
 in 1950 and after 60 years it reduced
while
 the other ratio of
expenses
 on
food
 increased
remarkly
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remarkably
remarkedly
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, country, expenses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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