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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart shows the expenditures made by houses,
food
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,healthcare,education transportation and other items in a
country
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 in the
year
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years
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 1950 and 2010. As
it
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apply
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is shown by the chart, in 1950 almost
two-thirdsthird
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two-third third
 of expenditure was on housing
whereas
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 the
expenses
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 of
this
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averageexpenses
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average expenses
has
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have
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 been increased for
food
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,
transport
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and transport
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 in 2010. From the given data,more than 70% of
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expenses
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the expenses
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 of the people in
this
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country
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 went on to housing in 1950.The
second
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 most expenditure in
this
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country
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 was on
food
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.All other
expenses
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 Which include education and health care and were less than 20% in total.All other expenditure in 1950 was only 4.4% which increased to roughly 20% in the year 2010.It shows the new additional category in which people made their
expenses
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 more in comparison to 1950. It would seem that housing drained the highest percentage of money for the people in
this
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country
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 in 1950 and after 60 years it reduced
while
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 the other ratio of
expenses
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 on
food
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 increased remarkably.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, country, expenses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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