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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts.It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter * Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team * Summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts * Say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you kindly to provide my feedback about the decision of your company to use the money you devoted for charity reasons either supporting a local
team
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 or organising a concert. I would like to put forward some of the
benefits
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 of sponsoring the
children
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's
sports
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team
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. Sport is one of the best ways for
children
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 to develop skills like intellectual ability improvement as well as providing an admirable physical situation, while they are in growing ages efficiently. If your company sponsors the local
children
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's
team
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, it will be motivated more and advocate the number of
children
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 who are in great passion to participate in
sports
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 activities. It will truly help them in their overall development.
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, there are a few
benefits
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 of having open-air
concerts
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 as well
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 as the local food vendors can put up their handmade staff and earn some money. Local bands can participate in the showcasing of their talents. It will help them to get some promotions and bigger opportunities. In my perspective, your company should sponsor the local
children
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's
sports
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team
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 as it will drive more
children
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 towards
sports
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. It may inspire other companies
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 to do the same. Having the open-air
concerts
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 is a good idea but the community has already had five
concerts
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 in the past two years. So to sum it all up, the
benefits
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 of sponsoring the
children
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’s
sports
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team
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 outweigh the
benefits
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 of paying for open-air
concerts
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.
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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