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The best way to improve health is to exercise daily. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, most
of
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people
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 consider that daily
exercise
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 is crucial for
human's
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a human's
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 healthy and happy
life
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. I totally
argee
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agree
 with those
people
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. Because, recently years most of
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people
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 are having
a
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 overweight related to their modern
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life styles
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lifestyles
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such
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,
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 fast food and shortage of physical movement. The overweight is one of the
biigest
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biggest
 causes of any
diseases
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.
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, daily
exercise
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proven
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that
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 way to prevent any diseases according to the studies and research. As well as, daily
exercise
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 is important for not only
physical
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the physical
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 development of
people
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, it
also
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 so significant for the mind and spirituality
of
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the
people
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. Due to
many
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 research,
people
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 who are doing daily
exercise
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 constantly have a low risk to get stress and sickness than
people
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 who don't do any
exercise
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.
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, daily
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 can increase the capabilities of
human
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 mind and provide the stabilities of human spirituality.
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, daily
exercise
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play
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main
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 role to improve
quality
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the quality
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 of
people
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's
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life
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 during
this
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 stressful
life
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.
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