Today family members eat fewer meals together. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?
For some reason nowadays people seldom get together to have meals with their families. Compared with the past, there are some attraction and activities that people think is more important. To support my statement,
this
essay will interpret my view and related reasons.
In the past, family members were used to having meals together, which was the moment they can
communicate with each other. Wrong verb form
could
Conversely
,now the communities can use the internet or chatting applications to interact with their parents anytime. Thus
, the time
of
have dinners with the family has declined and relatively is not as precious as before. Change preposition
to
For instance
, young people tend to spend more time
hanging out with their peers,naturally, they prefer to eat at a restaurant with them instead
of their parents.
On the other hand
, the core value of society has transferred. The public regards that it is worth putting any effort into a career and future life rather than the companion of a relationship. Consequently
, the working hours have been extended and the time
they stay at home has been shortened. Finally
, they even eat more meals with their colleagues and friends. To illustrate, in my country, it is necessary to join events or activities that are held by your department, or you will not get a promotion or extra payment.
To conclude
, technology makes
families can communicate easily, which means family Verb problem
allows
time
is not limited at the dining table. Individuals tend to spend more to explore
themselves and Wrong verb form
exploring
develop
their careers. Wrong verb form
developing
Overall
, I think is a positive trend, there are still lots of forms to gather with family members.Submitted by lovedimension4 on
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task response
The essay lacks focus on the reasons for the decline in family meals and does not fully address the prompt. More emphasis should be placed on providing reasons for the decline and evaluating whether it is a positive or negative trend.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction and conclusion. However, the body paragraphs lack clear organization and coherence. The ideas are not effectively linked, and the overall flow of the essay could be improved.