Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In today’s modern society, there are many young
people
who tend to admire famous athletes,
although
there are a lot of bad rumours about them.
However
, I think the admiration for the famous celebrities will bring their fans good value.
First
of all, sports stars are
people
who get over many difficulties in their life to achieve success.
Therefore
, their fans can look at them and do what they do.
For example
, Muhamad Ali is a famous boxer who practised a skill thousand of times to become one of the best fighters in the world and many
people
who love boxing have followed him to practice and improve their own skills.
Furthermore
, good activities
such
as volunteer works of famous sports stars can impact their fans.
In addition
, well-known athletes can encourage the
people
who admire them to do good deeds for society.
For example
, as we all know, Cristiano Ronaldo is the greatest of all time,
besides
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he is the athlete with the most volunteer activities in recent years. For that reason, a lot of
people
have participated in Ronaldo's volunteer campaigns to help
people
in need. In conclusion, there are a lot of bad rumours and scandals about sports celebrities. But they are still good
people
and think of community, so they deserve to be admired.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • admire
  • role model
  • excellence
  • hard work
  • dedication
  • cheating
  • misconduct
  • critical evaluation
  • guidance
  • positive influence
  • negative influence
  • inspiration
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