Do you agree or disagree with the idea that young people can teach older people?

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believe that young
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can teach older
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. As Chinese philosopher and
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Confucius said,” When three are walking together, I am sure to find teachers among them. I will select their good qualities and follow them, their bad qualities and avoid them”. Whether to
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from other
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, based not on the age of those
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, but based on
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whether
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we can learn the right
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from them. In
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of older
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have
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more experiences than young
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, young
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still have many good
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to learn from.
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of all, young
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have more advanced and innovative interests and hobbies.
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, young
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have interested in cutting-edge technology
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as AI, robots and computer science. Some are
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creating
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technology than older
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since they
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access
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new ideas and be taught in
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nowadays.
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, young
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start their life younger than older
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, they are living
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rapidly changing world, they have much more open horizon and
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than some conservative older
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who refuse
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new
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happen or changes. Young
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are
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to be influenced at
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early age, which is a changing world,
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, compare to
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, many older
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already have
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on something or judgement, so it is hard for them to change
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or accept new
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point, older
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should learn from young
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to have a changing
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to view the world
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of
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from
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days.
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, young
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can learn from older
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about their failures or successful ways, so that they can make progress or prevent failing. In all, I think
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argument is not completely true, since in my opinion, young
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can learn from older
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, and at the same time, older
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can learn from the young
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, and the most important thing is that they need to learn from each other based on the good part of the others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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