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Some people believe that everyone has right to university education. Therefore, government should make university education free for eyeryone. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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When the proper age comes for deciding whether to go to university, many young adults cannot afford it. Many believe that studying for higher degrees should be free for everyone.From my point of view, the restriction for going to
universities
 must not be about
money
. Many youngsters may be hugely interested in studying at
universities
, but they cannot achieve it because of the entrance fee. Many people want to find decent jobs that require a high education degree; if they apply to some high educational institutions, they should pay a considerable amount of
money
 that could not be affordable for many adults. Almost everyone has dreamt about their future job since childhood;
however
, in many countries, many
universities
 should be paid to accept
students
;
as a result
, they may work in some places despite their desires.
On the other hand
, if
universities
 become accessible to anyone, young adults might not study enough in school to be ready for high academic levels.The government can make
universities
 free for everyone.
However
, in some cases, college or high
schools
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students
 may not attempt since they will consider studying at university would be approachable. If all
students
 with low levels of knowledge are accepted, society will not have professionals with different abilities, which could be detrimental
for
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 a country's future.
As a result
, some educational filters should be done choosing
students
, which is not mean receiving the
money
 from them but
also
 on their level. (In conclusion, many
universities
 require
money
 to accept people which is not fair as not being successful in attending
universities
 classes should not be for tuition.
However
, it has better off be more about academic skills that
students
 had previously.
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