The knowledge we gain from our personal experiences is more valuable than the knowledge we gain from books. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Recent research
suggest
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suggests
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(s) that personal
experiences
(autobiography,
life
story, journal) (are) more important than from(from yok) learning what is written in(on) the
books
(bills,
reports
). personal
experiences
(autobiography,
life
story, journal) inflict (s) pain(acı vermek) to us and (,)
generally
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,generally
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the pains are bigging us. but according to some (,)people
books
(
reports
) say(ing) that what we will live in the future. I partly agree with
this
statement we are learned some by(from) personal
experiences
(
life
) stories
although
writing(written) in the
books
(bills,
reports
).
Firstly
, when i(I) finished my(my yok) school, i(I) tried to learn
crypto currency
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cryptocurrency
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(cryptocurrency) and
then
i(I) invested most of my
money
(cash, found, pay). even though(buna rağmen) it always seems like I'm making a lot of
money
but actually
i
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I
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was lucky to(in) my trades. in the past, all
books
(
reports
) which
i
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I
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read always it(it yok) said to me you(I) must use a
stoploss
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stop loss
(stop loss) but when
i
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I
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used (a)
stoploss
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stop loss
stop-loss
(stop loss), the stock market always stopped me and
then
it was increasing fastly because there was not easy
money
. One day, my(a) big part of (my)
money
suddenly lose out because i(I) didn't use (a)
stoploss
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stop loss
stop-loss
(stop loss). What I didn't learn from
books
, I learned from my mistakes.
On the other hand
, writers generally write about their
experiences
(
life
stories) in the
books
.
for instance
, one of the reasons talked up by some (is) do many
travelers
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travellers
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(travellers) know, or do many readers know?' everybody
have
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has
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(has) (an) in opinion for
this
subject. in my opinion, If it weren’t(was not) for those who travel a lot, those
books
wouldn’t(would not) have been made. To(in) conclusion, people who can involve(dahil etmek) art write their
experiences
as the book(s). They don't want others to make mistakes they have made in the past.
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