The knowledge we gain from our personal experiences is more valuable than the knowledge we gain from books. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Recent research
suggest
(s) that personal Change the verb form
suggests
experiences
(autobiography, life
story, journal) (are) more important than from(from yok) learning what is written in(on) the books
(bills, reports
). personal experiences
(autobiography, life
story, journal) inflict (s) pain(acı vermek) to us and (,)generally
the pains are bigging us. but according to some (,)people Add a comma
,generally
books
(reports
) say(ing) that what we will live in the future. I partly agree with this
statement we are learned some by(from) personal experiences
(life
) stories although
writing(written) in the books
(bills, reports
).
Firstly
, when i(I) finished my(my yok) school, i(I) tried to learn crypto currency
(cryptocurrency) and Correct your spelling
cryptocurrency
then
i(I) invested most of my money
(cash, found, pay). even though(buna rağmen) it always seems like I'm making a lot of money
but actually i
was lucky to(in) my trades. in the past, all Change the capitalization
I
books
(reports
) which i
read always it(it yok) said to me you(I) must use a Change the capitalization
I
stoploss
(stop loss) but when Correct your spelling
stop loss
i
used (a) Change the capitalization
I
stoploss
(stop loss), the stock market always stopped me and Correct your spelling
stop loss
stop-loss
then
it was increasing fastly because there was not easy money
. One day, my(a) big part of (my) money
suddenly lose out because i(I) didn't use (a) stoploss
(stop loss). What I didn't learn from Correct your spelling
stop loss
stop-loss
books
, I learned from my mistakes.
On the other hand
, writers generally write about their experiences
(life
stories) in the books
. for instance
, one of the reasons talked up by some (is) do many travelers
(travellers) know, or do many readers know?' everybody Change the spelling
travellers
have
(has) (an) in opinion for Correct subject-verb agreement
has
this
subject. in my opinion, If it weren’t(was not) for those who travel a lot, those books
wouldn’t(would not) have been made.
To(in) conclusion, people who can involve(dahil etmek) art write their experiences
as the book(s). They don't want others to make mistakes they have made in the past.Submitted by ozbekibrahimcan on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite