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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Small numbers of
people
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 are highly paid in some countries, which arises a disputation between two beliefs; some believe it is a positive point for a country;
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, the other idea is that there should be no significant variation in salaries, which is the same as my opinion. Many
people
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 may consider remarkably paid
people
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 who could help countries' economic growth. If somebody earned lots of
money
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, they could put lots of
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 on some project that could help many young
people
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 find a
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 and develop the economy. Huge
investment
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 started from wealthy
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 who had no
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-related
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;
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, they could have space to think about creative ideas,
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, who changed not only their countries' development, make a difference in the whole world as well.
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, the salaries which government restrict can bring more
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 satisfaction among
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. Without limitation in the number of
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works
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 give, it may cause many problems in workplaces since if some employees were highly paid while they do not work as hard as them, it would cause
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 dissatisfaction. If someone in a low
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 position did not experience a dramatic salary difference, their work quality would not alter. A proper atmosphere would be provided in workplaces as nobody compares each others' salaries. In sum, if the government controlled the
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people
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 are given from their
job
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,
people
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 may satisfy and have better communication in the workplace, while having the
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 idea would not have a considerable effect
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 a country.
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