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Write about the following topic. The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #internet #access #information
There have been many advancements and inventions in
techology
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technology
 in
the
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recent years and
internet
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the internet
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 is one
such
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internet
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the internet
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people
 have been able to extend the ways of gathering
knowlege
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knowledge
.The following paragraphs will
demonstarte
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demonstrate
 my thoughts and views on the above statement.
Firstly
,
internet
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 has made
lot
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 easier for
the
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college kids in terms of their academic studies.
For example
, if the students want to do some research on the topic called Wind energy they can easily get all the relevant ideas
availabe
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available
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any of the websites online rather
then
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than
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 searching and reading different books.
Secondly
, it has been easy for the
people
 to learn
new
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 cultures and traditions.For an instance,
number
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a number
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 of food
receips
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receipts
recipes
 can be learnt from online applications
such
 as you-tube or
facebook
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. and different types of food can be tried at home just by watching a video.
In addition
 to
this
,it has been possible for the population to make
themseleves
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themselves
 aware of what is going on around the world.The news about the war between Russia and Ukraine was
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releases
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released
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 the same day on
internet
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 which made neighbouring countries
to
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send help as soon as they to the
people
 in the war. Recently, when
Taliban
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 took over Afghanistan the Canadian and American
government
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governments
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 moved millions of
people
 out of the country and saved them from being ruled under the cruel leader.
This
 was only possible because of the information available on
internet
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. Overall,
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internet
 is a great resource of information which is very easily accessible.
People
 must try to take advantage of
this
 facility and can try to use that information in a good way.
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