Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The
people
of every country must be facilitated by the free health service but they should
also
pay for high-cost
treatments
. I completely agree with
this
statement that every country should provide free of cost basic medical services for
thier
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their
the
citizens because they are taxpayers and
also
it will
represents
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the humanity
for
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the
people
of the nation. I would like to explain my point of view in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, The states collect tax on everything from their residents,
therefore
they are responsible to fulfil
thier
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their
basic
health related
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requirements. The
government's
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must provide at least basic medical services excluding the latest
madical
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medical
treatments
like
heart-surgery
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and other kinds of operations.
For instance
, everyone pays tax according to the government's rules and regulations, whenever he/she does any activity
such
as
purchaing
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purchasing
something,
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electricity,
burn
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gas
in
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home
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and so on and so forth. Every department mention taxes
list
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on the bills. In return,
people
deserve basic
treatments
from the hospitals. In
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, the free medical
treatments
also
show a kind face of governments
for
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thier
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their
the
public. They should introduce some health schemes for
people
of the society.
For example
, our previous government introduced a "Sehat-Card" scheme which is used by the
people
for their free
treatments
in every civil
hospitals
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. Every
card-holder
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go
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to the hospital and explain his disease and give them his allocated card.
However
, they will evaluate that if the treatment is within 10 lakh they will deduct
treat
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fees and get back his card. In case
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exceeding the limit,
people
will pay reaming expenses.
In
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conclude
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, as I have already discussed, every nation must provide basic medical services free of cost and I am in
the
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favour
this
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statement because
people
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the people
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of every country are taxpayers and
also
it's a sign of kindness.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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