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The government is spending alot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. What extent do you agree

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It is considered that the
government
 expended
large
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amount
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 of
funds
 to create awareness about activities on
other
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 universe whereas some certain individuals viewed
this
 as a waste of
funds
 which should be spent on other public challenges. I strongly support the
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later
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 notion.
This
 essay tends to
discussion
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 other public challenges that should be attended to by the
government
 and
reasons
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 why they should be combated.
To comes
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 with, there are
plethora
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 of public issues that should be viewed by the
government
.
Firstly
, lack of adequate public amenities. It is well known that in
Nigeria
, there
are
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insufficient
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 provision of public amenities( good road, adequate water supply, stable electricity supply)by the
government
.
Instead
 of lavishing money on knowledge about the planet, the
government
 should rather disburse the cash on providing enough facilities where they are
duely
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duly
 needed e.g developing and
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underdeveloped
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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 countries.
For instance
, in
Nigeria
, Kwara state is an
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underdeveloped
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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 country which lacks
good
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 road network, adequate water supply and constant electricity supply.
Therefore
, public
funds
 can be spent on these challenges in order to ease the
populace
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 pain in that geographical region.
Secondly
,
Low
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 salary rate is another challenge affecting the community.
This
 has been a fundamental issue in
Nigeria
 which needed to be addressed.
Government
 should expend public
funds
 on salaries and wages in order to increase the standard of living of the residents.
Nevertheless
, there are numerous reasons why these problems should be addressed.
First
 of all, it enhances
citizens
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 standard of living. When these issues are combated, it relieved the populace of their stress and reduced their cost of living.
For example
, in
Nigeria
,
kwara
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 state residents protested about their lack of amenities. After a while, they were provided with
good
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 road network , adequate water supply and stable electricity supply which makes life easier for them and even made the geographical area more civilized.
Secondly
, it enhances
improvement
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 of the affected community. Once those things needed are put into place,
these
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 will help in the development of
the
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society. In conclusion, it is evident that lavishing money on the awareness of other universe is not really necessary.
However
, there are more public issues that should be addressed and mitigated. The responsibility is on the
government
 to navigate
on
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the public needs and how the needs can be met. 🙏🙏🙈
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