Task1: The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
The given diagrams illustrate the life cycle of salmons, a large species of fish.
Overall
, it is noticeable there are a total of three stages in Linking Words
this
life cycle, commencing with the egg Linking Words
stage
and ending with the adult Use synonyms
stage
.
In the first Use synonyms
stage
, the salmon's life cycle begins with the hatching of eggs. These salmon eggs are laid amongst the reeds and small stones in the upper Use synonyms
river
. It is notable that Use synonyms
this
part of the Linking Words
river
is slow-moving. In Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
stage
, after a period of about five to six months, the baby fish that are born are called fry and are about three to eight long. The fry swims from the lower Use synonyms
river
to fast flowing.
In the Use synonyms
second
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stage
, after Living in Use synonyms
this
lower Linking Words
river
for a period of about four years, the fry gradually grows into a smolt when it measures about 12 to 15 cm in length. Use synonyms
Following
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this
Linking Words
stage
, it is ready to migrate into the open sea which Use synonyms
the
smolt for roughly about 5 years. Add a missing verb
is the
After
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this
Linking Words
stage
has been completed, the adult Use synonyms
stage
is approximately 70 to 76 cm long. Use synonyms
Finally
, the adult fish swim back to the same location where they were born.Linking Words
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