Your workplace does not have a carpark, and it is causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter Describe the problems this is causing Explain what benefits a car park would bring to the company Suggest a solution for the car park problem
Dear sir,
I am writing
this
letter to draw your attention towards the installing of car parking at our work location.
Let me explain the situation, many employees complain about parking space.Firstly
,they are feeling unsecure
,because they have to put their vehicles in street parking and Correct your spelling
insecure
last
week,one of our employees' car was stolen.Due to
this
many workers are afraid to bring cars to work place.However
, if they are using public transportation, then
it will take more time to reach the office.Thus
, these are the problems are
faced by employees.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Additionally
, If a company has their own parking facilities, then
it would be beneficial for the organisation itself.Firstly
, workers are stress-free about their vehicles,so they can give more focus on their work. Another reason is that stolen activities will be reduced in our space.More people will come with
their private cars,Change preposition
in
therefore
they will reach
on time.
Verb problem
arrive
Lastly
, I would like to give a suggestion about this
matter,there is an empty space beside our office and we can get that place on rent,so it will reduce the chances of problems,which are created by car parking.
I hope you will address this
concern as soon as possible.
yours sincerely,Submitted by pp6859 on
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the benefits of having a car park, such as how it might attract more talent to the company or improve overall employee satisfaction.
coherence cohesion
Include smoother transitions between paragraphs to make the letter flow more seamlessly.
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You provided a clear description of the problems and offered a practical solution.
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Your writing tone is polite and appropriate for the context.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making it easy to follow your points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite