Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?

Exercise
is
one
of the most prominent
factor
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for
healthy
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a healthy
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life for any age group. Regular basic
excersie
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exercise
is always recommended by doctors
to
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elder
people
but they hardly ever follow the
advise
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. In the below
eassy
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essay
easy
, I will discuss the following statement. As we know a good healthy life can be achieved by proper diet and regular
exercise
. Especially if you are a
seniour
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senior
citizen
then
it is a must but for
them
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regular
excersie
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exercise
may not be possible as most of the elder
people
have
daibetes
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diabetes
, sugar or any other form of health issues.
In addition
to
it
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older
people
are lazy enough to walk because even if their mind
support
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their
body
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bodies
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would struggle to keep up.
This
is
one
of the common
problem
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seen and they may not have the desire to regularly
excercise
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exercise
.
On the other hand
, we have seen older
people
engaging in physical
acivities
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activities
such
as early morning walks, later evening walks, indulging themself with kids in a park or practising yoga. These elder
people
were always motivated to do basic
exercise
atleast
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at least
3 times a week. For the
non motivated
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older
people
one
way to keep them motivated is mixing them with
simlar
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similar
age group where they can talk and
exercise
among themself.
For Instance
: In
this
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contemporary times it
very
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common to see
communties
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communities
arranging clubs for different age groups
such
as
waking
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walking
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clubs and laughing clubs for elders. To sum it up,
excercise
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exercise
is
one
of the important
factor
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factors
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to lead a good life
escpecially
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especially
for older
people
.
Although
they may not keep up doing it on a regular basis but motivating them to a simple yet effective regime is a good way to maintain
a
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fitness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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