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As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandrain become more widely spoken, there is a concern that many minority languages may disappear. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice?

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As time goes by, human culture tends to mix into one part. With globalisation going on, more and more
people
 tend to learn English, Spanish, Chinese or the other majority language, which leads to
minority
languages
 declining. We must take some action to protect those vanishing
languages
. Much cultural treasure has gone because of the improper protection or leaking of protection. As time goes by, it's inevitable that majority
languages
 will replace some
minority
languages
. Those
languages
 always have declining culture
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, and its loss is the loss of all mankind. Now that we all know
this
 is an unstoppable process as mankind develops, we need to take steps to protect those
languages
 and the cultures behind them.
However
, protecting cultures doesn't mean we should overprotect them. What we protect should be selected. A language from its lost culture should be protected, but we can't force
people
 to learn it, for it may be too complex
to
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 no one willing to learn it. It sounds better to build up a specific museum to protect those
minority
languages
 since it is inevitable outed by
people
. Overall, it is not wrong that we take some steps to protect those
minority
languages
. Whether a language is popular or not, it always symbolises the hard work of an area's
people
. It's the treasure of all mankind, and we can't lose them.
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