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In many cities more and more people are choosing to live on their own. What are the reasons behind this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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Today, as we can see many
people
 tend to live alone in some cities,
this
 essay will express the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 issue. On the one hand, some
people
 like to live alone
this
 is related to the progress of technology
this
 lead to the
people
 have very less need to each other and they prefer to be alone,
furthermore
,
this
 matter leads to do not have any self-confidence for communication with each other if they do not want to change their life these reasons can become to a serious problem
such
 as they can suffering to an illness like mental diseases,
in addition
, their isolation can lead to long-distance from another
people
 that
this
 matter has a big consequence for them.
however
, many the
people
 think that when they are alone they are very calm and they said that
this
 topic become to habit for them and they do not have any need for other person and they solve every their problem too easily, because of the human is a social creature and always need to get help from another
people
, they want to deny
this
 matter for
this
 reason that they want to prove to other
people
 they are independent and do not need to another
people
, when we have communication with other
people
this
 can help us to be successful, and maybe hard to access in another city and the
people
 have to be alone. In conclusion,
this
 is a negative aspect for
people
 who prefer to be alone and always the human need to interact with other
people
 and communication can improve their self-confidence that leads to a better life and we always depend on interaction,
otherwise
, we suffering to a different type of illnesses .
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