Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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course of action to improve the public's health, while others believe Correct your spelling
efficient
that is
not the right action, and would not have the required effect ,and other means should be applied. This
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centers
will not be Change the spelling
centres
sufficent
, and education is the preferred Correct your spelling
sufficient
meathod
.
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sports
centers
will not help all the public. Change the spelling
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to say, sports
although
a good way to stay healthy it
is not a cure for all the illness of humankind, Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
will not help those who are already sick. For example
, patients inflicted with cancer could not be treated with sports
nor could it have been prevented by it.
A public awareness campagin
is a far more Correct your spelling
campaign
efficent
tool to use. Correct your spelling
efficient
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the public is by putting Correct your spelling
reach
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advertisements
infront
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more
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problem
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instead
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allocate a lot of money for anti-smoking Correct your spelling
governments
government
campagins
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campaigns
this
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against
aginst
the risks correlating Correct your spelling
against
for
smoking.
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sports
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manner
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