Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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course of action to improve the public's health, while others believe
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will not be
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. Increasing the availability of
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will not help all the public.
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a good way to stay healthy
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is not a cure for all the illness of humankind,
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, patients inflicted with cancer could not be treated with
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nor could it have been prevented by it. A public awareness
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treating
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governments
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smoking. To conclude,
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are
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useful
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of health but not in a public
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as it will not help all of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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