Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In the 21st century, most of the world's population prefers to travel abroad for pleasure. One part of the
people
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believes
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that
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incorrectly affects the
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in which these
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have vacationed, while others do not agree with
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statement.I completely disagree with
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statement, as tourism promotes the economy and culture of the
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countries
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. On the one hand, travellers can harm the
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they have visited.
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, among ordinary
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there may be criminals who may defy the established rules in
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.
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, it is the harm that the ecology of the
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state receives.
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, according to volunteer companies, the amount of garbage left by visitors from other
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is growing,
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tourist places of Kazakhstan.
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, visiting foreign
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has a list of advantages for both the
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nation and sightseers. Tourism improves the country's economy, promotes tourism companies,
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country's attractions around the world and
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increases the employment of the population.
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,
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is a good opportunity to find a new social environment and friends for everyone. While travelling, a person can meet
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who are
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visiting the assigned state or meet
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from the
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country, which will broaden
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's minds and help in future promotion. In conclusion, the pros outweigh the cons and visiting other
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for pleasure will improve many aspects of these states and the identity of tourists should be checked so that they do not harm
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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