The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart indicates the variations in having three types of electronic devices - washing engines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners,
in addition
to the proportion of families in a country spending time doing chores from 1920 to 2019. Generally speaking, in 1920, the number of
people
having washing appliances was the largest among them all, and there was almost no one owned a cooler.
In contrast
, when it came to 2019, most households have a refrigerator or a hoover,
whereas
some of them don’t have a washing machine. And during
this
period of time,
people
had
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declined
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time spent doing their chores. To be more specific, in 1920, 40% of
people
had a washing machine, and 30% of them had a hoover , yet almost none of them(0.5%) had a refrigerator.
Nevertheless
, after two decades, the number of the population owning a cooler had risen to roughly 52%,
while
those owning washing appliances and hoovers had both risen by merely 20%. In 2000, those having refrigerators and vacuum cleaners have risen to 100%, yet those having washing engines remained constant at 70% for decades.
In addition
to that, there were 50% of families did their chores every week back in 1920, but the number of
people
doing it has declined throughout the years, and merely 10% of them were doing so in the year 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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