Some people think that governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (eg cost, environment). Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
People
attitudes differ regarding government allocating budget on the speed of public transportation or on the other facilities and Change noun form
People's
issues
of cities. Both these views have their own merits which are going to be considered in the following essay.
The notion of necessity
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the necessity
spending
money on the faster public transport may seem understandably logical to a group of people for some reasons. Change preposition
of spending
Firstly
, as time goes by and the population explosion is happening, the importance of travelling through cities becomes more vital because of the heavy traffic as a result
of that. For example
, in Tehran city as a
capital of Iran, if there will be a more and faster subway and BRTs, fewer personal cars would be in the streets and it may lead to Correct article usage
the
a
less traffic. Remove the article
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Besides
, it has a direct influence on the
people's life. As an example, if a person is sure that he/she can arrive at work in less than 30 minutes, he/she could sleep more, enjoy the left times of the day and even have more efficiency at work.
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However
, I believe that further
investment on
the other priority Change preposition
in
issues
is more important. For one, unemployment
is a really basic issues
in every government that must be solved. As the inflation rate rises, Correct the article-noun agreement
issue
the
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unemployment
can inflict irreparable damages
and leads to poverty. So it is important to invest a lot of money to destroy Fix the agreement mistake
damage
unemployment
by creating new jobs. For another, the
air pollution has become a very concerning issue globally that Correct article usage
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is cause
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caused
cause
by a lot of reasons. Correct your spelling
caused
For example
, building factories near the cities, using many fossil fuels and etc. Therefore
, the governments should spend a high cost to have a clear plan to prevent them.
In conclusion, ,
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however
the advantages of allocating Add the comma(s)
,however
budget
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the budget
on
the means of transportation cannot be ignored, there are some other more important Change preposition
to
issues
such
as unemployment
and air pollution that needs more money.Submitted by sepideh.9876 on
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