Some people think that governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (eg cost, environment). Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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attitudes differ regarding government allocating budget on the speed of public transportation or on the other facilities and
issues
of cities. Both these views have their own merits which are going to be considered in the following essay. The notion of
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spending
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money on the faster public transport may seem understandably logical to a group of people for some reasons.
Firstly
, as time goes by and the population explosion is happening, the importance of travelling through cities becomes more vital because of the heavy traffic
as a result
of that.
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, in Tehran city as
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capital of Iran, if there will be a more and faster subway and BRTs, fewer personal cars would be in the streets and it may lead to
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less traffic.
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, it has a direct influence on
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people's life. As an example, if a person is sure that he/she can arrive at work in less than 30 minutes, he/she could sleep more, enjoy the left times of the day and even have more efficiency at work.
However
, I believe that
further
investment
on
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the other priority
issues
is more important. For one,
unemployment
is a really basic
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in every government that must be solved. As the inflation rate rises,
the
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unemployment
can inflict irreparable
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and leads to poverty. So it is important to invest a lot of money to destroy
unemployment
by creating new jobs. For another,
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air pollution has become a very concerning issue globally that
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by a lot of reasons.
For example
, building factories near the cities, using many fossil fuels and etc.
Therefore
, the governments should spend a high cost to have a clear plan to prevent them. In conclusion,
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however
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the advantages of allocating
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on
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the means of transportation cannot be ignored, there are some other more important
issues
such
as
unemployment
and air pollution that needs more money.
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