Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

today,many
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companies
have open places rather than they have distinct
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for
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different
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.I believe that
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of
this
way can be more than its drawbacks.
one
of the good
points
can be
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best
place
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rest
reast
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of the workers.
Also
,these places have a perfect view rather than
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separate
rooms.
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,as everything has two sides,
this
would not be exceptional.I think that
one
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of focus.
One
of the good
points
about open space can be nice weather and
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think employees can work in
this
place
better than before.
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, when they feel tired,they can go
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around
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place
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and get a lot of energy from nature.Despite some staff prefer to work separate room and they think
this
place
is good for them and they have a higher work speed.
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of open space can be enough light and
this
way can help company that
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saving
money because they do not need artificial light.
Also
,it is very good for employers.In
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particular
,natural light is not harmful to the eyes and it can help
employer
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employers
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healthy.
However
,
one
of
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the
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cons which
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can think of is that some staff can
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concentrate on their
works
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.Due to the fact that
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in these
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there
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a lot of
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noise
notice
.
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, they get confused in
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place
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believe that open space design can have more benefits than drawbacks.
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can have
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a better
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feel than
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in separate
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rooms.Personally,
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the good
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points
outweight
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outweigh
to its bad
points
.
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