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level of youth crime is increasing day by day aroun the world. Give some reasons and some sollutions to stop it.

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It has been observed that crime rates among the youngsters are significantly raising across the world.
This
 essay shall discuss the reasons behind
this
 and give some possible measures to solve it. To embark, the foremost cause is unemployment. To elaborate on
this
, it is true that much younger generations are not able to get the desired job despite getting a college degree or good edification.
This
 is mainly due to the cut-throat competition between the freshers in the community. Joblessness and poverty are linked with the crimes. Most
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youngsters are taking the wrong direction to earn money to fulfil their needs. They are inclined to do small wrongdoing
such
 as pickpocketing and burglary. For an instance,
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 young criminals it is proven that the main cause behind offences is the lack of money.
Furthermore
, media platforms continuously show
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crime scenes on television.
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young minds; they can try to do the same in their real lives.
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the movies have been showing the actors with drug abuse and drinking alcohol
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 movie. These may inculcate by youth. They can
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 behaviour and become juvenile delinquents in the community.
However
, there are some proactive measures to mitigate the issue of youth offences. The foremost one is providing job opportunities to the people.
This
 will reduce the rate of unemployed people and make them capable enough to fulfil their desires
hence
 they do not involve in criminal activities. In conclusion, notwithstanding there are many causes
such
 as unemployment and repeatedly introducing negative scenes will motivate the younger generation to become violent, provided ample job chances can ameliorate
this
 situation.
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