Nowadays in some countries children are given fewer responsibilities compared to past.Some people believe it is a positive development while others argue otherwise.Discuss both views . What is your opinion .Give some relevant examples from your own experience.

In every stage of human ,
life
each one has to carry out certain
responsibilities
in their
life
. Recently, it seems that most of the pupils are getting fewer duties and
responsibilities
by
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regarding
to
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the earlier generations and most of them are considering it as a good part of the development and others vice-versa.In
this
essay, will discuss both the views and why my opinion agrees with the latter with relevant examples.
To begin
this
, in my opinion, it is true that today's
children
are living out of certain
responsibilities
than the students in the past and I don't believe that it is an advantage of development. In the past times, the pupils are living in a joint family with certain values and beliefs
are
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following within the house. And the
children
also
play certain
responsibilities
such
as helping
father
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and mother
in
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the household chores and assisting in purchasing and cleaning houses.So, they are aware
about
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the difficulties which their
parents
and family members are facing.
Moreover
, they had a clear bond with their family, friends and the neighbourhood too.
For instance
, on some festive
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occasions
occassions
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children
have the responsibility to decorate houses and supply sweets and food items to the neighbours.
This
makes them happy and aware of the culture and
value
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held in the family. Admittedly, today's
parents
are not giving
such
types of
responsibilities
to their
children
during their childhood and younger period.They completely pampered their
children
as a pet and give them everything they want.
Additionally
, adults never pressure them to do some tasks in the house or even in the family. People always support them in their studies and
therefore
students are not at all have any understanding about family matters and didn't show any
we
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feeling with the family members. To exemplify, based on my own experience most of my colleagues have grandparents and they would not take care of them and don't have any affection or love.I believe that these issues are due to the lack of awareness given by
parents
and understanding about the family
responsibilities
which lead them to a negative and selfish way of living. In conclusion,
children
are treated as pets without
given
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any tasks and duties in their day to day
life
than the earlier.But it is important that pupils
also
follow certain
responsibilities
in their family with the guidance of
parents
, which will definitely create a positive way of development in
the
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life
.
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