A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.

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In our modern world,

people

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tend to be judged by their social

status

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and material possessions. Some

people

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believe that innate person's qualities, namely honour, kindness and trust, are not worth anything nowadays. I agree with

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statement and I am going to give my own opinion about it.

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of all, I want to say that when

people

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invented social media applications

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as Instagram, YouTube and Facebook, they became obsessed with the idea of gaining followers to their accounts.

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, some individuals tend to record bizarre videos, which are watched by youngsters and spread

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our society.

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, when those media giant companies began paying for advertisements in users' videos, everyone tried to evaluate their

status

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by amount of views and followers they had in order to impress their potential advertisement buyers.

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, famous

people

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are more likely to get a friendship

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of their popularity on the Internet.

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, I personally had experience in making entertaining, useful and quality content on YouTube. I started my social career with a low amount of viewers and wanted to cooperate with other content makers.

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, they didn't even study what I had recorded. They didn't trust me only because of those imaginary numbers on my page, they were interested only in their profit. To sum up, I would say that our traditional personal's values, which were admired in past, have changed dramatically. In my opinion, humanity cannot return to the

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quo. Now we are worth only for our financial and social

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

social status
material possessions
old-fashioned values
honour
kindness
trust
empathy
media influence
self-worth
metrics of success
financial achievements
community contributions
superficial connections
emotional bonds
life satisfaction
stress and anxiety
policy changes
community programs
restoring balance
personal character

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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.

Fully explain your ideas

Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these method are ineffective, and at worst that may be dangerous. To what extent did you agree with this statement.

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehical will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is better for a country's economy for people to spend money while others believe that it would be better for people to save money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.