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modern society, there is one section of people
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who prefers
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to teach
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young
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how to become
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responsible
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parent
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parents
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. For me,
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is very early to ask them to think
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the
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's role. I think tutoring on
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parental
activities to
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younger students will be in vain. Their thoughts are already filled with many
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diverse
activities like socializing, studying and many
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others
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. At
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time, adding
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completely different topic to them,
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may turn
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negative
. They may get confused
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, what should they focus on as their brains are still not reached
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a state to understand what these parental actions are, and
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may spoil their
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academics
.In fact,
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recent study conducted by
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the Indian
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Family Welfare Institute, reveals that the students who
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been taught to become real
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has shown negative effects on their mental skills. The parental activities should be very balanced. To become
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best
parent
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in the
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view
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of children,
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is pampering them. But as a
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, we should teach them the morals and ethics, which are very vital to maintain the
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harmony
in the society.
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, irrespective of how busy you are, there should be some amount of time dedicated to the family.
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everyone in the family and you can guide them
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in case
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incase
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in case
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of any difficulties they are facing in their roles. In
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conclusion
, It is advisable not to add any parental subjects
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younger students
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they cannot cope
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with the mindset they have at
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moment.
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