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The invention of the Smartphone marks a crucial turning point in innovation, becoming the most necessary item on everyone’s list. Today, it is rare to see a person without one, constantly entering data and searching for information. However, while it is a social milestone, the Smartphone is also responsible for a changing culture. Please share your perspectives on this topic and discuss your views on the subject from both a personal and professional perspective

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Today, definitely the mobile has an important place in our work or our profession and the
people
use
 that couple of hours during the day and
this
 is the biggest invention throughout the history,
this
 essay will explore personal and professional and express my opinion in the end. On the one hand, we want to check
this
 subject from a personal perspective, we spend many times
use
 of mobile for different reasons,
also
 the mobile can improve our life,
furthermore
, not only the mobile increased quality our life but
also
 it makes us very comfortable, personal
use
 of mobile like, we can check email and contribution in social media,
in addition
, the mobile could create a connection among
people
 around the world,
for example
, today, we can
use
 of a lot of software in order to have interaction with each other, like Whats
app
 and Instagram and something else.
On the other hand
, the mobile is not used just for personal
use
, and the
people
 around the world
use
 that for their job rather than using of computer, the
people
 prefer to
use
 the mobile
app
,
use
 of the mobile
app
 is very easy we just need
app
 store and we can search special
app
 and
then
 we can download it, there are many advantages in related to mobile,
for instance
, the mobile is very light and we can move that to any place to easily which is known as the portable, we can
use
 it more time compare to Laptop and it is very user-friendly appearance. In conclusion,
this
 device is very suitable for other efforts that can be a personal job or can be professional work, the mobile becomes one of the weirdest inventions in the whole world
also
 most of the
people
 in other countries need that for a lot of purposes every day.
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