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you friend has been offerd a place on a course a the university where you studied. He would like your advice about a place to live. write an email to your friend.

#friend #offerd #place #course #university #advice #email
Dear Shady, I'm writing to you today because I want to give you some recommendations about how you can find
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suitable
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accommodation
 while you're attending lectures. When I was
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 an undergraduate, I was living with my colleagues while renting a shared
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. Actually, we could not only divide the rent between us and save money, but
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 we could help each other studying by sharing different materials and resources for the courses that we were attending. In my opinion, the best place to start
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 research is by asking other students, who are registered with you in the same faculty, on the class' Facebook group about which places they are staying at. if you're lucky enough, you will find a group that
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 looking for someone to join them, or at least you may encounter someone who has the same problem as you!
Finally
, I would like to remind you
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 of the few fatal mistakes that you should avoid no matter the type of residency you will have.
Firstly
, keep an eye on the location in order to avoid being late to the class or spending
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 expenses on transportation.
Secondly
, try to be selective when it comes to choosing your roommates because they can afflict your concentration enormously. Can't wait to hear from you. With love, Youssef
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