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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Computers
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 have fundamentally changed our lives and more and more people feel that modern appliances are required in
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educational establishments for studying, whilst others do not support
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 essay. I will discuss both points of view and express my own opinion on the matter.
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, I will explore the positives of students using technologies and
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, I will discuss why we need to avoid using them. On one hand, progress has given us many opportunities to study and succeed.
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, it is challenging to imagine the way we get an education without
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, as it has been transformed and now it is more comfortable to learn something nowadays.
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, it required many days to find important information in ancient times, but today we need five or ten seconds to google it.
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, the quality of knowledge and skills which are given by modern technologies is high,
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 why our world is developing so fast.
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, every single university tries to use
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 for teaching purposes.
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, each computer is much more powerful than a human's brain and it makes us everything
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 of us when we need to count
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, a student relies on technology so much even if he needs to
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 homework or study mandatory subjects,
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 as chemistry or physics.
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 of
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, the youth becomes helpless without their MacBooks or iPads. On top of that, our memory suffers
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 hours spent in front of a display. The experts believe, that searching for any type of information on the internet affects our skills to memorize negatively and we may suffer from Alzheimer's in the future. In conclusion, there are many both
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 and
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 effects brought by the creation of
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young students during the period of their studying. From my point of view, there should be a balance between real education and working with a technic.

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task response
Make sure to address both sides of the argument in more detail and provide a more balanced view of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the introduction and conclusion by clearly stating your position and summarizing the main points.
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