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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading US to buy things. Other people think that advertising is So common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #attention
It is thought by some
people
 that the promotion of a
product
 increases the selling even if
people
 do not need
this
product
, while others argue that promotion is so old and we can find them any were. I completely agree that promotions help increase the selling of products and convenience
people
 to buy things they do not need. On one hand, several
people
 believe that a lot of companies use a method to convince
people
 to buy things they do not need it. To explain, they bring a famous person to advertise
to
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the
product
 so the
people
 think that
a
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it a
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good
product
 and buy it.
for example
,
samsung
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Samsung
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 brings famous
people
 to speak about their phones and to convince
people
 to buy
it
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them
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also
 they advertise
on
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in
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 many ways to reach to
huge
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a huge
the huge
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 number of
pepole
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people
.
On the other hand
, numerous
people
 think that advertisements
is
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are
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 so old and you can find it every were,
such
 as
bus
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the bus
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 station, street and on the internet.
furthermore
,
this
 advertisement has false information so the
people
 do not pay attention to it while some say that
this
 advertisement is boring because they use the same thing over and over. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 think the promotions for the
product
 is easy to convince us to buy it because they study a lot about the
behavior
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behaviour
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 of
people
 and there is a company which is the
specialty
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speciality
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 about the advertise and they take a lot of money to advertise. In conclusion, companies use a method to convince
people
 to buy things they do not need it
for instance
, they bring a famous person to advertise the
product
 while others think that advertisements are so boring.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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