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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation, Describe some of the problems over reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

#people #car #transportation #reliance #cars
Nowadays, personal
four-wheeler
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 became trendy.Most
the
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individuals have it.It is
also
 a huge issue in the modern era. In the
next
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firstly
i
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 will provide you positive side and
last
 but not least give you
side
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 effects. It appears that in
last
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 decade every peculiar become more and more wealthy.The main reason is
inflation
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the inflation
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 of money.The extra income generated by management.
That is
 the main base to have
a
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 automobile in every house.It provides a high-class luxurious feel and
help
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 to reach the destination on time.it provides safety to the persona who I in the car.
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, the horseless is changed gradually to a complication and the main drawback is parking in big cities.In
Delhi
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 there is a rule for buying a vehicle. The person who is pursuing a car has to show enough space of setting it down.It runs on fuel and extracts huge pollution as a gas by
silencer
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. It leads to damage to the ozone layer of the earth. To conclude, Motorcar is a really needy object which provides comfortable and takes
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consumption of the good environment by damaging it and becomes a large issue for health.In suggestion only use personal transport when you have to go for a long distance.
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