Some people think that individuals are becoming more dependent on each other in modern society , while others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give opinion.

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the
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. A school of thought believe that each person can live with the support of others in the
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contemporary
society whilst others think that people are only living
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any more dependency.
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both the arguments with examples. There are
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of reasons for the independent living of persons in
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society
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, individuals
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to live in a specific
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and status of culture. Mostly, they think that approaching others for any kind
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help will decrease their status in the family and neighbourhood.
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,more dependency will
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to
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of responsibilities and afraid of the involvement
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matters of family and friends. And some of them think that seeking help from
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others
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will think as useless in life.
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, nowadays both the women and men are working and even the
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youngsters
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don certain jobs with their studies for their personal expenses. Through
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they want to become self-sufficient
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. On the
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fast and busiest life, no one
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enough time to consider their older parents and kids.
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, the professionals are very much dependent
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other members
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the family and
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neighbourhood
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, hectic schedules and stresses in the offices affect the mental conditions. So, the people are highly
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that spending time with relatives and friends
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better to get rid of
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negative side.
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women
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and
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men
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are more likely to approach their parents to take care of kids and seek help from neighbours to consider the old parents when they are not at home. To conclude, the way of living
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changing and people consider being self-sufficient
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of ascribing status in modern society.
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, some of them are less likely to be independent
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considering
their family with their career.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnectedness
  • globalization
  • digital communication platforms
  • mutual dependency
  • economic globalization
  • international supply chains
  • social validation
  • advancements in technology
  • individualism
  • technological tools
  • smartphones
  • personal computers
  • cultural shift
  • self-sufficiency
  • individualistic attitudes
  • personal achievement
  • self-care
  • interdependency
  • societal structures
  • emotional support
  • underlying foundations
  • human interaction
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